Evander

Hi, Awesome chapter! But first the nitpicks. said , "Jamie Stuff in red: You need a space between the comma and the double quotation mark. mostl likely forms, Stuff in ...

Hi, This is good, in my opinion. But a few nitpicks. and I'm still getting sued to the feeling of driving a car Stuff in bold: Do you mean used ...

Hi, First a few nitpicks... Two cops came to Savvy's house about 10 min. after Margret called them. Stuff in bold: "min" should be minutes. Savannah leaped through the already-broken-by-Margret ...

Hi, The story line seems interesting, a teenager on the run, exciting! But a few nitpicks. It's been 2 LONG months of high school Red stuff: What I learned in ...

Hi, I have recently found your story, and decided to review it. Here we go... and said , "It's a writing style that blind people can use to read and ...

Hi, I like the concept of your story. A girl who has Amnesia, very interesting. But first a few nitpicks. I look down and my bed is the same , ...

Hi, Very interesting story you have. I can't wait for next week. But a few nitpicks. staying far away from the regular courier who passed through on t uesdays and ...

Hi, This is not that interesting, to me at least. As Baal said, you are showing not telling. And a few nitpicks. The second paragraph mentioned "Hunters". What exactly is ...

Hi, First of all welcome! Second of all nitpicks. They wanted a computer that EVOLVED . I would use italics on EVOLVED instead of caps. living with that kind of ...

Hi, This is lovely, but I have a few nitpicks. Why was Ana being put down? She seemed like a nice girl, usually most of the antagonists have a reason ...

Hi, Raven here for a review! I read Minecraft: Ender Rising, and you said that Keldeo was driving a car, yet in this you state that he is 11, so ...

Hi, I love minecraft! But a few nitpicks. This story is all bunched up, there were barely any paragraphs. "Hmm... Should I follow?" I ask my self. There is no ...

Hi, This is good, in my opinion. But a few nit picks. Drop the beat.. Check my watch, recheck my watch The needle’s stuck at 3, it won’t go across.. ...

Hi, The story was very interesting, and I love the ending. But a few nitpicks. my skin red for where its claws dug into me“do you need me to prove ...

This is awesome.