Drop the beat..
Check my watch, recheck my watch
The needle’s stuck at 3, it won’t go across..
With a prudent smile on my face I investigate the case,
Cut to the chase; no more time to waste,
It’s just a phrase, mate, let’s get this straight;
Taste my savory haste to escape this place of hate..
No more shit; no more averting from fate,
Don’t hesitate. Just brace yourselves and Wait..!
Spin the coin…
Heads, I win the game
Tails, the game wins me,
Either way I own this business,
Imma beat all my adversaries..
I don’t give a Damn
‘bout what the people say,
My Name is for the Fame
Once again it’s K Double A..
‘Em bitches tell me in my face, Komal you be so amazing;
But behind my back only shit they be talking
And now it doesn't sound shocking
‘cause I am done listening to the critics, they be carping..
Sometimes I feel so bleak
That I go down the street,
I wander all around
So, ‘em people call me a freak
Got a love spell around my neck
Now no curse can send me to hell..
Remember to kick their ass
Before the hour ends and they ring the bell..
Drop the beat, once again..
Stop me if you can from hitting on your dreams,
This game is for the people of reality, So, hush-shish your screams
Riding off a horse, driving a chevelle, it’s so rare
Like a bird without wings, I’m helpless..
Loads of fishes in my fish tank,
Uninvited they be swimming
A bunch of crap I’m dealing,
And now my ceiling seems so low
Like it’d fall to my toe…
..and this world is so messed up
That we’d never know..
What would happen next
‘cause right now I’m playing the reverse roll..
We start from the bottom then we reach the top..
Sooner or later we drop down a few steps and crawl back up..
The tables would turn..
And the haters would run..
I’d be partying with victory..
And them faces would burn!
Alright, check my watch, recheck my watch,
The needle ain’t stuck at 3, it Shall go across…
And the game I live for is mine for the taking..
-K Double ATM
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Hi,
This is good, in my opinion. But a few nit picks.
If you are going to capitalize the "The" in the third line, you need to put a period one the end of the second line.
Ellipsis are three periods. There are a couple of times when you did use "..." but most of the time you used ".."
Now I am not sure if this "..!" is grammatically correct, but I thought I would point it out.
"Imma" is not a word according to the dictionary.
And one last thing, this is rated E for Everyone yet multiple times you swear.
But I loved your Rap and hope you keep on writing!
Raven,
Thanks you Raven. I appreciate your concern.
Thanks again for correcting and liking it.
Much love,
KdoubleA.
i really like what you have done here....your feeling of kicking their behinds for what they spoke of you...want them to fill in your current situational shoes...its nice....

you need to write more though...try and become more precise. shorten them lines, in time , you will have it all just fine.
its a rap if i am not wrong.
keep it short with the rhyme,
or else it be a crime..
no more to waste,
in any case,
i like the taste.
it definitely is not comparable to your style of writing, just expressing a little bit of preciseness, hope it helps...will like to read more of this.
haha, i'll keep that in mind next time. Thanks a lot thou.
Much love,
KdoubleA.