ErinYount

Hi. I really really liked the piece. It comes to me at an amazing time in life, because I am going through this insomnia, caused out of loss. So, every ...

Hi. First of all, I like the piece, I like the idea behind the piece, and the technique, very much. Yes, there are parts that didn't work for me. Like: ...

Hi. I really liked the piece. "I pull over for the night, I lay down and turn off the lights"... this worked the best for me. "I pull over for ...

Hi. I liked the piece in general, but a few lines didn't work for me. "Makes me blush and wide-eyed too"... This reads with glitches, interrupts the flow, and for ...

Hi. I liked the piece. It was powerful, and it leaves an impact on the reader. "A moment of silence That will soon be forgotten." worked the best line for ...

Hi. "I am brittle. I am thin. But I never snap." was the best line of the piece, for me. I really liked your piece overall. It's amazing how you've ...

Hi. I liked your piece, definitely. The first paragraph was a very good beginning, like a very personal conversation with someone. Brought an instant connection with the reader. The piece ...

Hi. First of all, "Damn her, for her existence was the end of mine. If only I could disappear once more, and be nothing, once more." took my breath away. ...

Hi Fortis, Like with most of your works, I really love this one. I cant quite point out one thing, or two, so to say, that I liked the most, ...

Hi. " I know I can’t possibly be alone, or at least as much as I like to think, because of how many people there are in the world." that ...

Hi. i liked the piece quite a lot actually. It had a strange sense of innocence, entangled with hurt in it. Though it does not give us any details of ...

Hi. I liked the story in general. The writing was nice, and detailed, but not too much detailing. It was smooth, and it had a flow to itself. The whole ...

Hi. Your writing is captivating. Once someone starts reading it, they fallow through till the end. It was short and sweet. "At Christmas time, The reason children love snow, The ...

Hi. I really like this one. It's beauty lies in it's sadness. There is no one to hear the poems the glass is singing, and no one to see it ...

Hi. For starters I'd say you could have used punctuation more. Perhaps a comma at the end of each line, full stops at the end of the sentences. One has ...