Eraqio

Very emotional work. This is definitely a star. Some of the stanzas gave me a faint glimmer of classic love, the almost unending desire and passion for one person that ...

It comes off as kinda cutsey wootsey for more than a quarter of it then kind of loses me in abject randomness. It has a focus, dont get me wrong, ...

Great work. The questioning air mixed with the general waiting feel throughout the work definitely made it an interesting read. The topic is really specific hah, I wonder why that ...

Very lengthy and in depth concerning thought. The spelling mistakes that were obvious are nothing a quick going over with a fine toothed comb couldn't fix ^_^ as for the ...

The opening maintained a sort of loose grip on the present then as it went further along it slipped into a kind of afterthought. The character seems to make alot ...

hahah, I love a good Rant. I'm not really sure what I can say about this. I am a mighty foe of line length, and these short, agonizingly short lines ...

I think this could have used a bit more expansion on language and a few more complex words. There were a few typical lines that fell along the lines of ...

Interesting origin for the work's purpose and direction. Mentioned previously was the simple rhyming nature of the poem itself. For this, with its historic connection and chaotic core, a different ...

This comes off as mainly observational or even a situational poem. Its more of a frame by frame story of someone watching something happen. The patter in it all was ...

I love, LOVE the informal sence that you put forward at the very beginning, awesome. Now onto content. The wording and the phrasing all combined well with the rhyme scheme ...

This piece struck me as a bit banal at the beginning, but as I went along the language and inflection really surprised me. Well done with the conveyance of feeling ...

Practicing Catholic here hah. I'm usually content with "There is a God, be good to one another and make sure to help those who need a leg up." This work ...

I liked it. It felt very informal, and in poetry I think thats a virtue in most cases. Most. now aside from that, The pacing of the whole work just ...

Nice hahah. It comes off as kinda slutty but pretty much any affection these days is so who can complain? on to critique, I'd work on your punctuation a bit ...

Wow. Thats all, on first impression, that I can say. Now after I've overcome my shock... This was a great piece, honestly, from top to bottom, great vocabulary, metaphors and ...