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The Voyage of the Pied Piper Ch. 2 I watched as the bodies of my comrades were dumped overboard and the blood was mopped up in minutes. The insane captain ...

Hello Sak! I like this. Everyone can relate to the experience of the teased-up pretty-and-perfect mean girl who's actually a person inside. The hardest thing is to see a friend ...

The world is zombified Yeah all their brains are fried I would change this to another word. 'Yeah' is bland for such a dramatic poem. I know you’re mortified but ...

YOU HAVE NO IDEA HOW MUCH I LOVE THIS. Fantastic. Literally fantastic . I really have nothing to change, other than the fact that it's Tybalt, not Tibalt. That might ...

Roger awoke to the sound of horns outside. There was a voice shouting in Arabic which, after speaking, was followed by a tremendous roar of men and stomping of feet. ...

[If you're not up to date with the story, this chapter is pretty much self explanitory. All you need to know is that Henri is my young cousin who I ...

At that moment, I actually realized how long I'd been out. What seemed like an hour or two , was four months and three days . I n fact , ...

Another Sunday, the same routine , the same lies. This is what started my every week: waking up to an alarm, getting ready for church, and arriving there. It's too ...

"Melissa, how many times d o I need to tell you to wear your uniform!" T he teacher, Mrs. Ryan, demanded. "Go back home and put on your uniform. Now!" ...

It was still raining lightly when we got to lunch. “Come on ! I want to introduce you to some people.” Katelyn dragged me across the room towards a table ...

Hello! Whoah! I started reading this and developed a headache. It's one big block of writing! I would try to seperate paragraphs or even the dialogue; just so it's a ...

Yes, hello! I love your title. It draws me in and really makes me want to read your piece. Exquisite word choice. But where is your story? It says that ...

C laire turned to face the ebony gates of her school . O n the other side there was V iolet , who meant trouble . Not good. *** I ...

This is wonderful. It sums up love... perfectly. I don't really have much else to say. I know you may want grammar/spelling critiques, but there aren't really any that catch ...

I like it. It's cute and carefree and (: A few things to think about: I understand that this is a contest story, and I inferred that you have to ...