Published April 7, 2011
claire turned to face the ebony gates of her school-on the other side there was violet.and trouble.not good.
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i keep my head down in my lessons-violet would tease me and call me names becuase apparently getting a higher grade than violet in avendale high is a horrible crime.
"claire-get your head out of that stupid diary of yours" says gena my best friend."now what have you got for question 2?"
i love gena i mean seriously she's my best(and only i have to admit) friend.and no i am not hopelessly sad it's just that 2 months ago i was the new girl,who threatened princess violets ego-so i had to be blanked to make violet feel secure.that chick has problems.
i've got an AWESOME new nickname for violet.hitler.gotta go more later.
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therewas Violet, who meant trouble. Not good.***
I keep my head down in my lessons; otherwise Violet would tease me and call me names becuase apparently getting a higher grade than Violet in Avendale High is a horrible crime.
"Claire! Get your head out of that stupid diary of yours!" says Gena, my best friend. "Now what have you got for question 2?"
I love Gena. I mean, seriously! She's my best (and only) friend. And no, I am not hopelessly sad about it. It's just that 2 months ago, I was the new girl, the one who threatened Princess Violet's ego. I had to be blanketed to make Violet feel secure. That chick has problems.
i've got an AWESOME new nickname for violet.hitler.gotta go more later.Hey Cookie!
I've got a couple notes.
1) I made some corrections to the spelling and grammar mistakes in your story. Click on the spoiler to see them. Unfortunately, there were a lt of them. Try to work on that. (:
2) I kind of missed the plot in this piece. I understand that this is chapter two, but it is very short with minimal detail. Maybe talk more about how she felt about "Princess Violet", her school, and Gina. Does she like her school? What about her teachers?
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Other than those suggestions, keep writing! I see a lot of potential in you and your story! (:
Taylor