Emerson

This was overly simplistic, in my mind. The syllables were really short, the rhymes were real plain. It's just too simple and "easy" of a poem. The story behind it ...

You said, "My true love," way too much. I think it was just navel gazing, I couldn't really get into it or feel anything. it was written to your "true ...

Love, an energy that cannot be broken, but dispersed -- shattered, like splintered light; shards that rustle like the intake of breath in absolute silence. I don't really like this ...

I suppose I should have gotten upset and teary eyes when Kyle was found dead, but I didn't. and then when he was ok, I didn't really care. Perhaps it ...

Emotional poems are always difficult. This is navel gazing. Some of your sentences are fragments, or they aren't properly punctuated. You don't need all the spaces between each lines. This ...

That is creepy... I think "tell me" is repeated a bit much, but it still works. I think you should add more to it though, to clarify what is going ...

Jon was finding it easy to open up to Trent, and reminded himself that he shouldn't trust anyone so quicklu. Typo A beetle crawled through the supraorbital, a piece of ...

I know deathly mothers well... First off, give is some more punctuation. Poetry & Punctuation . It was a good poem, in that it wasn't written badly but... it could ...

A tree is small enough to fit on a window sill...? This isn't bad, but I don't think that I like this style, you know? I suppose they are riddles ...

"You're going all Dan Brown on me here, buddy." That, among many other things, was really, really funny. I'm kind of confused by where they are living. I get this ...

Punctuation! It needs it: Poetry & Punctuation . The last stanza reminds me of the line from one of Enigma's song: Let's hope one day we'll rest in peace on ...

I liked it! Par the norm, I can only grasp and slightly clutch at the meaning ^_~ But in any case, it was beautifully written, and I could also visualize ...

Guess who finally got around to this? :smt003 Scene One The 37 - year - old Albrecht Hearst was the vice-chairman of the public affairs committee in Vienna. At 1:30, ...

eep. Chandni, you know how I struggle with your poems ^^; I enjoyed a bit of the beginning, the first three stanzas or so, but it still got confusing. But, ...

Hmmm I liked the archaic-ness. But stuff like that is cool. I'm kind of indecisive on my opinions of this. It was cool, but then it was also really... empty. ...