Emerson

The ending surprised me--and for that, I really like this. I was thinking "well this is dull, it's just about snow... oh, wow!" It certainly got better. Although, something about ...

I liked this! It was good, but the last two stanzas didn't work for me. The repetition of being fattening by lies ("gorging on the lies until I'm fit to ...

To know this is written about a cat seems sweet, but the poem seems more than that. It's real simple, but I kind of like it for that... Like Jasmine ...

I don't really know what I thought of this... on some general notes, I think I'd like to see it with punctuation, and that you should either use quotes or ...

Ah, as a note, if you need something moved, just PM a mod and they can move it! (Like me!) ^_^ The repetition kind of shot and killed it. Repetition ...

I'm not entirely sure I liked it, because there isn't much meaning behind, "Birds get pushed out and then they fly." For some reason, I'm seeking something more than the ...

I saw this when you first posted it, but it needed to sink in, and I've come back to read it and am even more amazing. I think fall should ...

I remember: it was either yesterday or eternities ago, this is a good poetic line, but I hate it because "yesterday" and "eternity" have such a BIG gap that this ...

Well, I didn't finish this! Eh...Oh! and I shall move it into scripts, since it is a script. This was... odd. I've read several plays, and non of them are ...

in a field of violets or lavenders or whatever tickles you r fancy, I find it ironic that you have a typo in the line used for your title :lol: ...

This seems so perfectly romantic, that I can't help but like it. It reminds me of those times right when you have left a very nice event with your loved ...

I like how, while reading it, the way the words spin and twist, you feel like you are dancing. Skillful. ^_^ The first three lines took me a while to ...

Oh, I love it simply because I can relate to nestalgia! you have some lovely lines. The first two stanzas were the best, the last two... not so much. How ...

Erm, Well on a mod note you should respect everyones critiques and refrain from saying they are b'tchy critiquers--it is very disrespectful. First off, you need to punctuate it. Don't ...

I liked the ending, like snoink did but he rest was.... eck. I don't know. Too idea rather than thing. I think you need to do something else with that ...