Emerson

but i know different i have a heart and it hurts because what else but a heart could cause such pain? This was really the best part of your poem. ...

Hehe, thanks insomniac for suggesting me ^_~ And then, here I am..? All I really have to say is this: some things are poetry, some things are blog posts hiding ...

Welcome to YWS! I like your use of é to add syllables, haha. The AABA CCDC was good as well, although I suggest you try to clean the syllables up ...

I like it. ^_^ I'm not... sure how to help it out, actually. It isn't bad but it isn't a "Wow, amazing!" poem either, so I can only give you ...

I've read lot of poems about life and death... so the idea is used up. ^_^ but that is okay! One things the poems I have read have that make ...

Just a suggestion: You might want to add spaces between each paragraph so that this is easier to read. And, from just glancing over your piece, you have a lot ...

I think this is on the border of being a really good poem. More towards the "not" side, but I don't think it would be hard for you to jump ...

I think my biggest problem with this was that some of the lines made absolutely no sense, grammatically, and that made it hard to read. Here is one example: Curiosity ...

Well, not to be insensitive [like Rigel ^_~ kidding!] but it isn't a good poem. It's more of a blog post. I'm not saying you shouldn't write poetry. Poetry is ...

oh why do the push me to the brink of life. alredy my time's elapsed and now i live with all this strife. I've gotta stay and waste away the ...

Ah, Cal, beautiful. ^_^ I love the alliterations, and the flow it gave it, but at the same time, it was jarring. And the last creepy, so morbid and beautiful. ...

My heart was meant fo r you Be sure to read over your posts a few times first so you can catch typos :) I think this would actually work ...

You are like hot coffee on a cold day ; [s]but[/s] you always burn my lips when we kiss. I like it a lot! It's not really poetry with a ...

I think this poem would work really well spoken. Spoken poetry, beat poetry? I am not sure what it is. Otherwise, though, I'm not sure... The repetition doesn't really do ...

I really like the idea behind it, although you are making a generalization... everyone isn't like that. Just the scene/emo kids... haha. Take me for example! I go to school ...