Emerson

The man [comma] Greg Thron [comma] was assassinated five years ago. The man, and Greg Thorn, are both the same thing which is an appositive so there should be commas. ...

We're off with an interesting start! I liked the letter... I must confess that I am also rather angry at the entire world now, also, perhaps some may say, for ...

It's an interesting work. I like the idea of it, you can sense a plot but its....hard to follow. I only have two suggestions. The truth is the truth is ...

Rather catching, I'd say. It’s the kind of darkness writers love to write about and shiver as they imagine it, but it’s the kind of story you can’t get too ...

I loved the intro. Very impressive! You do a very good job with creating the character and setting it up. I'd love to see more and to know where you ...

This is really long. but, I'll get as much done as I can for now! So far, rather interesting! He didn’t believe her statement, mostly because he didn’t want to ...

I'm not sure what you mean by 'classic,' like....old? Because classic isn't really a style. Classic literature, by definition I suppose, is something that is from any time period but ...

It was a sunny day for October, not too hot that the heat permeated every pore and cell so that movement was made impossible; no, there was a slight breeze ...

I liked it, though they don't have house shows like these in America so I had to sort of guess what it all was. I liked that it was a ...

Well, since all Jim can say is, "wordy," I'll help you out a bit more. Yes, it is wordy. But what you have to do is pull back on the ...

I stood on the brinks of forever This part here, though fancy and creative, should be changed I think. "Forever" is too abstract, especially how you are using it. I ...

The girl shuddered in her tight Levi jeans as she waited for the cross light to turn green or for the cars to stop coming. I think 'coming' is the ...

If you make spaces between your paragraphs, things are easier to read—just A tip :-) Her naked shoulders showed the join between her back and her wings : tiny white ...

It seems everyone has gone over this a good number of times for grammar and what not. Since its a beginning, my only comment is that you make it more ...

I liked it, though it felt rough in places because sometimes you rhymed, and sometimes you didn't. It was a lot of repeating, which got on my nerves a little ...