Emerson

I've always liked how your poetry feels (or rather reads) so abstract but if I go over a few more times, really take it in, and I can find a ...

I follow in Bubbles foot steps, it was cliche, but it wasn't as bad as it could be. I'll drop the link that I constantly do on punctuation. You actually ...

as a great moan issued from the sky. The sky moaned? That seems rather odd. Tye continued there chant and as they finished the pentagram ( five pointed star) dimmed ...

Bonjour! His grey eyes held wisdom far beyond his seventeen years. His blond hair moved with the wind as if it had a life of its own. Because I'm going ...

I was meaning to look in on this... For you whining so much, I enjoyed this! It was very ominous, and I liked how it felt like we were looking ...

The rhyming was nice and the topic is good. I gave you the punctuation article on your other poem, again, I suggest looking at that, and using it as much ...

It's cute, but I think I'm slightly lost on what you are actually making a reference to (What is a hood phantom supposed to be?) You have a lack of ...

First off, go read this, Poetry & Punctuation . I assume this is poetry, right? Though its in the "Other" section? It doesn't really make much sense. Until the end, ...

Fand is always a master with this sort of thing, so I won't go over what she said. I do highly suggest you read this article, Poetry & Punctuation Read ...

Some parts make no sense, and you start getting abstract (I could call you, Call you into my grey sea, But the waves would come between us, My outstretched hand ...

Fand, I'm jealous of your poetic ability! I'm guessing this was the message: The mom pushed "lust" out of the boy, and so he preached "love" but eventually gave in? ...

I... think it was interesting but a lot of the lines didn't make sense. It almost got to the point where I felt like you were just jumbling stuff together, ...

I liked the subject behind it... struggling to meet your parent's demands is common. But I won't repeat everyone above in saying that it could have been better presented :-D ...

I... kind of liked it. A queen of the country the beauty of hope. As a sentence, this doesn't really make much sense to me...unless there is supposed to be ...

I'm not going to edit your grammar, okay? I'll just edit the general piece :-D [s]Cold, warm. Loud, quiet. Dull, bright. Two naturally selected endeavours thrown together into a world ...