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Re: The Ugly Duckling
Hello. It's interesting that you chose this fairytale to comment on. :) Rain poured, time passed, And still no sign of the mother. I feel like you're trying to make ...
Jul 24, 2014 -
Re: Reorient
Heggo. Another one of your works. I don't decide to like them before I read them, but I did this time because it was another one I was around for ...
Jul 22, 2014 -
Re: Of Starbucks, Blushing Cashiers, and Batman Fistfights
Ha ha. This cheered me up. Funny, bright and a very interesting title. XD I enjoyed this work and you write comedy well, such as here: He shot me a ...
Jul 21, 2014 -
Re: Take Off Your Glasses
Hello. I have never read an MJ fanfiction before. XD Good Points 1. I noticed that this piece was very dialogue motivated and I like that: "Half yes, half no," ...
Jul 17, 2014 -
Re: Return and Delivery
Hello again! I have noticed in your works you have a thing about leaving out punctuation and capital letters and things. And it works really well: especially here. :) The ...
Jul 17, 2014 -
Re: Will you hold my hand?
Yes I will hold your hand! XD I will also review it O.o Slight continuity error with the first lines: I'm not that brave to take the risks And face ...
Jul 17, 2014 -
Re: Coffee
Hello you! Featured again! XD Yay I have to say this work made me upset. :( You say you lost feelings, but frankly, I lost my mind. Isn't it madness ...
Jul 17, 2014 -
Re: Nuts for YWS
Hi. So you obviously love being on YWS XD So much so you've written a work about this. The rhyme scheme is very simple, quite childish, almost nursery rhyme fashion. ...
Jul 17, 2014 -
Re: REDACTED
Hi. So I don't think you wasted points on this at all. Nu-uh. I think you have encouraged expression here in a very positive way. I could tell this work ...
Jul 17, 2014 -
Re: A Hierarchy of Needs
Hi. :) So I have reached the end of this loooong piece. XD Nah, really it was very good :) The opening line in particular, was very good, very gripping. ...
Jul 15, 2014 -
Re: Beginnings, Endings and History: An Insight into a confused future
Hi. So this a "beginning work" kind of like another Genesis story that you've created. It's interesting that you chose to write about this. :) I like the use of ...
Jul 15, 2014 -
Re: Some More Melodramatic B.S. That Nobody Will Read
Hi. I don't think you should have chosen that title unless you were being ironic? I think it sends out a bad message. Your writing is very melodramatic, but the ...
Jul 15, 2014 -
Re: My Goddess
Bonjour mon cher! To be honest, I thought this was another of your dark works. You have this very rigid style in your works, where the stanzas are the same ...
Jul 11, 2014 -
Re: Soggy Lampshade
Hello :D So there are so many different possible interpretations for this work! So many! Wet Triangle :) Hmm, we have already had the rude version. :P Personally, I don't ...
Jul 11, 2014 -
Re: The Hospital Room
Hi. I wasn't keen on this work to be honest. It was a bit too sentimental to be real. :( I hate hospitals. It seems like every other day, here ...
Jul 11, 2014