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This meadow we were in was a small place on the top of a very large hill overlooking the entire town. The very in this sentence doesn't need to be ...

When the queen and king of Eriot, after fourteen years of being married, bore their first child at the ages of thirty-nine and forty-two, the entire kingdom rejoiced that their ...

I remember quite well how humans from across the galaxies shuttled down in as many species of inter-galactic craft as there were passengers. I remember thinking about how important this ...

He was the dinosaur equivalent of the homeless guy muttering to himself at the dollar store, but in 65 million years, he would become a celebrated fossil, the symbol of ...

One thing I don't understand is how Kate could build the time machine. At the beginning, she seemed clueless: I didn't care that I couldn't understand what he was telling ...

Before, I would have immediately started saying how it was okay, because you were still you, just somewhere else, in a far off world or something. This is a run-on ...

It seeped out, dripping onto her skin everytime she said something wrong. Everytime should be two words: every time. He stopped seeing her after a while and began seeing all ...

This wasn't the first time I found myself looking down 15 stories off the ground, as the cold wind ruffled my damp hair. Most of the time you should spell ...

Walking up to the bar, I beckonded the tender over. Beckonded should be beckoned. Bowing low, he suffled to the side, and let me pass. Suffled should be shuffled. How ...

When I stared you in confusion, you just laughed. This should say, "When I stared at you in confusion..." You look at it and casually shrug. Look should be looked. ...

Because who cared if her descendents and the rest of the human race saw the end of Earth as long as she was six feet under when it happened. Descendents ...

He look around, and noticed that he was on a beach! The exclamation point isn't needed. Instead of being in a normal position in the sky, it turned out to ...

I have redish, orangish hair with orangish, brownish clothing. Redish is spelled reddish and orangish isn't a word. I don't wear any armor because I beleive that heavy stuff such ...

This is a good beginning, but it is way too short. Prologues aren't suppose to be long, but they should at least be a few paragraphs, not a few sentences. ...

The stench from the Latrines is Latrines shouldn't be capitalized. over-realming and the rats are numerous. Over-realming is spelled overwhelming. All we are sleeping on is a group of wooden ...