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Hi! I'm here to leave a quick review!!
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I was the big shot of the city. I was the strongest there. My sword had slain many. My name was known around Genoa. I am Datto. I have redish, orangish hair with orangish, brownish clothing. I don't wear any armor because I beleive that heavy stuff such as that would slow me down. I am only 15 and so far I’ve become Genoa’s strongest being. At least on this planet. You see, I live on a planet that has 3 moons. These moons are actually other planets that our present day scientists believe have life on them. Who knows, maybe there is life on those planets. The closest moon comes by almost once a week. We call it Genoa 2. The other planets are to far away to see clearly, but they can be seen. There have been legends that fairies travel between the 2 planets. Personally, I don’t believe any of those crazy old legends. I’ve never seen a fairy before. But everything I knew about our distant sister planet, and all of the legends that go along with it, was about to change…
Well this is a rather intriguing prologue here. I don't believe I've seen anything quite like it before. Although before I get into the actual content of things here, I've gotta start by saying this doesn't really read like a prologue would. A prologue is often some sort of scene whereas this reads far more like the sort of narration one would expect to see at the start of a story or more like some sort of premise or detailed description of a world perhaps. I think you've gotta look into it a little more before continuing with the whole prologue angle here.
Besides that, there's also a bit of an issue with the paragraphing here, I feel like everything is a bit too crowded into this one tiny paragraph and I think it could do with a little bit of spreading out here and breaking into at least a couple of smaller paragraphs. Besides those few issues though, it does seem like it'd be a really interesting premise and quite a bit of work does seem to have gone into things here so on the whole, a solid piece here.
Aaaaand that's it for this one.
As always remember to take what you think was helpful and forget the rest.
Stay Safe
Harry
well here we go! 
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