EliteHusky

Excellent. Strong ending. Strong language. Strong emotion. Dancing upon the thunder of immortality. Good use of imagery throughout. Keep on writing. Look forward to more poems. Sincerely, Elitehusky

While grammar is an issue, as pointed out. I believe it is worth stressing that the content was very interesting and did sustain my interest. Overall a re-reading this for ...

Thank you for your comment. This chapter is almost impossible to understand without first reading the Prologue and following chapters in order. If you think of it as a novel, ...

It depends on perspective but for a politically correct figure... they look like they are thirty but everything is not as it seems (I'll let you create a list of ...

Thank you for your comment, changes have been made concerning basic punctuation. The flashback is not meant to be too revealing and key pieces information still remain temporarily hidden. Plus, ...

Thank you for your comment. Please feel free to point out those grammatical errors as sometimes, and I say this after reading the link you provided earlier, formatting issues can ...

Thank you for your comments. Plenty of personality to come.... Over forty pages written and well... a few fights. Next chapter entitled "Fighting With Demons" so that's a little heated. ...

I do think that this was very short, but short dosnt always mean it's bad. After reading this poem a few times over i still dont understand what it's truley ...

Beautiful! Please specify. Sincerely, -Elitehusky

Brilliant! Love! I cannot believe I missed that! I knew it was like a puzzle that I just could not solve. Warm Regards, -Elitehusky

Remember, no matter how many reviews you get (and whether they are positive or not), practice makes perfect. In regards to my previous remark, However I did feel that your ...

Great poem. The use of "but" to begin the second verse indicated a change in the movement/flow of the entire piece. Maybe I'm over examining it, but for some reason ...

Clear dialogue. The wording was almost perfect but you really portrayed the character's feelings with a "reasonable degree of effectiveness". Keep at it. Warm Regards -Elitehusky

It was short, but that was good. storms of life My favourite phrase in the poem! Warm Regards, -Elitehusky

I'm not a big fan of Ramantic Fiction but despite that and the fact the chapters were a bit lengthy, you did a resonably well job explaining the details which ...