EliteHusky

Hello quietloud798, First of all, I thought that this work of fiction was filled with emotion. Despite the structure and formatting of some of the sentences featured, I liked the ...

Hello! Good introduction. The use of words such as "alien" really added the aspect of mystery and the unforseen, in your story. I like what you did for the following ...

Okay so far. You definitely have a storyline, which is good, although the plot appears a bit vague. After reading Viva LA Vida I and Viva LA Vida II, the ...

The words of your poem coincide perfectly with the theme of fire, that is a pro. The only con that seemed to strike my mind was that as I read ...

Great Poem. As I read it I could not help but imagine U2's "Get Your Boots On" as a soundtrack for your verses. Although since it is poetry it's potential ...

Since this task is rather based on the individual I'd rather not critique this piece, however I will provide you with feedback saying that it is pretty neat and I ...

Good use of dialogue but for this part, I heard a rustling in the bushes.Could it be a werewolf? I found that a bit too prophetic, in terms of revealing ...

Your last line really caught me by surprise! As for a preface I think you have certainly provided enough "bait" although I felt that it would strongly attract female readers ...

Fairly good poem. I think the emphasis on key parts definitely transmitted to the reader but I think you can biuld upon it. Being fairly solid with the exception of ...

Good start. The storyline is intriguing to say the least but there are some parts which made hesitate as they might not have blended completely. when they spoke it caused ...

This piece of poetry was really well constructed. I liked how you used your character's viewpoint(s) to channel the, english language in your favour. That last bit sounds unusual but ...

This story just pulled me right in! The beginning was similar to a maze in terms of vocabularly. You mentioned a cobblestone road, an erie setting with a young boy ...

A very intriguing story to say the least. The overall theme of crime and justice (in a sense), is not one of my favourite reading topics but regardless, the quality ...

Great poem. Very unique and innovative vocabulary, such as using an alleyway to capture an atmosphere of bleakness, darkness, and as you put it, blindness. Now I am a strong ...

Greetings, Overall this piece had quite a few punctuation errors which somewhat seemed to cover the essence of the story you were trying to convey. The beginning was very interesting, ...