Elinor

Hey Madi! Welcome to YWS! We met briefly chat, and now I'm here to review. I'll say now that this wasn't that good. It seemed a little bit flat, and ...

Eh, not a fan of this one. It seemed a bit too rough, like you rushed through it or something. This was a nice idea, and you've got some good ...

Hi Jenthura! This just seems like you got a really cool image in your mind and that this was just a test to see how well you could describe it. ...

Hi Biffle, I felt like I had a shortage of breath while reading this story. It seems incomplete to me, in a way. There were also several things that bothered ...

Sorry, but I can't really say that I like this. To add to what Knightley said, it seems more like a journal entry or a letter and doesn't really have ...

Hiya Midnight! I'm going to be blunt; this was dry and unconvincing. You're showing us that the intended audience is the adult, and in order to fully appreciate a poem ...

Okay! So, hello, and welcome to YWS! I'm Elinor, and I will be your reviewer for the evening. - Have you ever tried writing a poem before, sweetie? This isn't ...

Hey Sarah! Eeh. Not too crazy about this one. It's got potential, but it really needs a lot of polishing before it gets to final draft quality. Right now it's ...

Hey Pacific! Well, as the poem stands, it's good, for a first draft, that is. You've got some lovely description in here, but this poem did have an unfocused, gritty ...

Hi! In addition to what June and Hero have said, there was something about this poem that struck as very bland. There is practically no imagery, your word choice is ...

Hey Jared! This certainly wasn't bad. You've got a nice, interesting style, and I'll be eager to review part two once I'm finished. I loved all the characters and the ...

Hi Jessy! I don't believe we've met! I'm Elinor! Anyway, to your poem. It was nice, and I absolutely adored the imagery that you used. However, your focus in this ...

Hey, this was nice, but I really couldn't see anything in it that related to a telephone call. It all seemed to be just about listening to recordings. I also ...

Hi Scarlett! This was very nice. It was strong in all areas, but there was one minor thing that I didn't like. It had to deal with a line that ...

Hi Seana, and welcome to YWS! This poem has potential; the word choice and imagery were excellent, but that seems overshadowed by bad grammar, a lack of proofreading, and an ...