Elinor

Hey there! For your first poem, I will say that this was rather good. You creating a compelling, memorable story! There were a few things that bothered me, like your ...

Hey there! I'll say I have to agree with Jagged here; you take an interesting idea with a lot of potential and then sell it short. I had just a ...

:cry: Oh, Sammi! I had no idea things were so bad. *hugs* I thought this letter was well-written. I could really feel the emotion that it took to write this, ...

Hi Fizza! This was okay, but your beginning needs a lot of work. It's a little too vague, and it just consists of sentence after sentence of actions that lack ...

Bailey, I will say that you've got a decent start. Your idea for this fresh and original, and I can tell you put a lot of effort into this- the ...

This was...all over the place. Even the idea of it is cliche. You don't develop your characters enough; they're cardboard cutouts who I don't care about in the slightest. Right ...

Hey, Zoray! As a standalone story, this really didn't do much for me. It just seemed like a cliché fight scene with a cliché follow-up and a corny ending. James ...

Hey Fizza, and welcome to YWS! Remember me from your welcome thread? ;) Okay, so! This was okay. It needs to be cleaned up a little, but I definitely think ...

Hey firelight, and welcome to YWS! I don't think the repetition here really does you any good. Sometimes repetition can work, but here it's just mundane and really bogs done ...

What happened? Your other poem was so good and this It's cliché from the very beginning and not as touching as I think it should be. Poems about love and ...

Hey! I liked this. It's really tough to write a villanelle, but I think you handled it quite nicely. It follows a compelling storyline, and the idea seems original and ...

Hey Dreamy. I didn't enjoy this. It felt distant and choppy, like you had a bunch of random ideas and/or visions and decided to incorporate them into a story. The ...

Hey! This was just okay. I can't really tell where it's headed, though. It just seemed like a story of teenage angst where you shove your views about money are ...

Hey kook! I like this poem about the Boston Tea Party. It had a nice ring to it, and it was funny. I just had a few comments. On the ...

Hey! I apologize in advance if the review is so short, but I only have one minor qualm. Your attempt to build suspense in this part is...failed, for the most ...