ElaBrave

Hi again :smt001 The lack of punctuation is basically the only problem here, I've included it in bold , any other problem words I've put in bold with my explanation ...

Hi there :smt001 The things I'm not sure of I've put in bold and my comments and suggestions are in brackets. The main dilemma is the lack of punctuation at ...

Hello Explosive Pen (I see you're being called "El"). I've never had a physics brain and I don't take physics, so I believe every word of that poem because I ...

Hi there :smt001 I've underlined the bits I'm not sure about and my explanations and suggestions are in brackets. Leaning (Leaning [i]in sounds better) to hug me, i (make it ...

Hey there! Just a few things: (The word/s I wasn't sure of I put in bold and my explanation/suggestion in brackets.) All she had was all she was gonna get ...

I briefly skimmed through the previous responses, but have decided to remain unprejudiced in my thoughts of "hopeless hope". Don't worry, it's a good thing! I really like your poem. ...

As "twilight tiger" said - fantastic imagery. I could picture the scene very vividly, due to your powerful usage of words. In a way, I guess your poem could be ...

Your attempt at a "short poem" is certainly admirable. I struggle with that kind of poetry because I'm more emotionally-inclined, which gets on one's nerves on occasion. I am impressed ...

I am in awe of your word usage! This is a powerful poem and I found that I was picturing it and I could see the details as you have ...