Ego

I actually did like this a lot--it is evident you wrote it on impulse, yeah, but it was also well written in that it had a voice, and in that ...

The second way is through being blooded. This is the most common way as well. Vampires who seek a lover or child usually use this method. When drinking from a ...

Gotta back Crysi on this one--don't go there, Reich. Anyway, I like the deepness of this poem, it just needs more, like the others have already said--my suggestion, is this--go ...

*shivers* bone chilling, Jack--maybe thats cuz I'm drugged up right now, but maybe not. I liked this part a lot by the way: wave after wave of salt burning forgotten ...

Amateurs-- Own em all, read em all, and you're missing one: The Highwayman has a short story at the end of it. It's not a forgotten realms book, but he ...

The crosshairs were a sort of cross of crusifiction to Sade Moraniz, a pathway to whatever awaited them after their unexpected death. "Cross of Crucifiction sounds impossibly repetetive...I don't know

I find it really amusing when people try to tell someone their poetry is bad. Poetry can be ANYTHING, dammit. It's only wrong when you set out to do something ...

I couldn’t keep my focus on anything but Donovan and everything that has happened in the past day should be "...everything that HAD happened to me in the past day." ...

:oops: *is impossibly flattered* Wow TBR, thanks! I really appreciate this...you have no idea. Thank you from the bottom of my heart. --Hunter

Well, you didn't give us much to work with..but from what you did give us, it looks pretty good. Certain word choices could be imporved, but that come with time... ...

Looks good, my only peeve is-- Now, those swords were unbreakable with steel forged by scientists. He didn’t know what was in them, but he did know that it was ...

I've been noticing some tense errors in your writing... Also, your dialogue sounds a little off. You should try to make it sound how someone would actually talk, not how ...

Lovely. Simply lovely. I like the way you present the characters, especially in the opening lines. I think, however, that your dialogue could use some work. The language is too ...

I liked this...I actuallt wanted to read more...but there is n't any! I think you could tidy up some of the sentences by nusing a greater variety of words, but ...

bitch. in the best sense of the word. :shock: Not sure how to respond...clarifiy for the rest fo us?