Duskglimmer

Excellent choice of wording. You definately got me thinking even after I'd finished the poem. Great job.

I really liked this, Hunter. Really, well done.

Okay. I'll work on that and see if I can't revise it a little.

Thanks. I was hoping that I did a good job on it, but it as sort of hard to write, considering that I'm the Jen character in real life. I ...

NICE. I really liked that last part in the parantheses. The rest of it was sort of a jumble, but it worked. And I hope it helped you vent and ...

It was a bit long, but over all, well done. The title made me think it was a "this can't ever be" sort of poem, but you surprised me. I ...

Yes, but the fact that only some of it rhymes, does make it sound a little odd.

It was nice and simple, easy to read, but it seemd a little short. And I can't say that I actually feel what's going on. To me, it could have ...

The last stanza confuses me. I'm not sure what exactly you were trying to say.

It seemed a little flighty. I couldn't really figure out what in the world you were trying to say until the last few lines, and then it was over before ...

Thanks for the comments. I know it's nothing new. I wrote this more to get it out of my head then for the sake of writing something that hadn't been ...

Okay. I'll try to keep that in mind. Thanks for reading you two. I had an idea similar to your "All the magic is sent to another world" thing. Except ...

Chapter 6 The Captain stood on deck and pressed the intercom button. “Good morning,” he said. “We will be disengaging from the docking port in exactly thirty seconds. Please be ...

Chapter 8 I jumped to my feet as a branch snapped behind me. I had been sitting for at least a half an hour, leaning against a tree, staring at ...

I like this alot. I can't really find anything that I would change about it.