Durriedog

Haha, this was good! But I have a few nitpicks. "I am bored and made tired To the end of my time." - the 'to the end' line seemed out ...

It was a pale green grassy patch with little critters and flowers moving around and < (Why the paragraph here? And 'critters' isn't a very serious word, so if you ...

Over all, an enjoying and intriguing read! Some very large worded, tasty phrases in here! Yum! It sounds kind of like a chant one would say over another, a prophesy. ...

Hey! Welcome to YWS! Whoa, I really likes this! Just a few nitpicks; a) there were no capital i's b) The chorus was a bit lacking. Maybe say that it ...

Hey! Welcome to YWS! I'm Durrie, and I'm your reviewer for - ugh - now! You can spit out your slanders, And you can cast your spells. But you won't ...

Hello! Well, as is said above, your rhymes were inconsistent. Also, 'She'd given birth to three kids. She never shouted or hit.' I think it would sound better if you ...

Hey Classy! I remember you talking about this in chat! Messa like ^^ I see you write it like a movie. This is cool. You're very descriptive and I got ...

Hi! So, here is chapter one, at last! It's taken some time to get it together and presentable enough for all you guys, but it's finally here! Does it carry ...

Wow! This is really brilliant! Please do continue and keep me posted!!!!!! Sorry that I don't really have a review for you, but everything worth saying has already been said. ...

“Penny, where have you been?” my mother spat. < (I don't think 'spat' is the right word here) Any other teenage < (teenager?) might have given her a sarcastic remark, ...

Ooh, how terrifically horrible! Good boy, Leth! I just noticed one thing; "group of them had form behind her." You mean 'formed'? ~Durrie :smt023

Hey! Nice lyrics, I love them! I totally agree with NightOwl, I'd buy it. Sell it, pulish it! Let it become a hit! :D I only had one problem with ...

My love is of a birth as vile As e'er a man could find himself to be. Leading saints to taint Eve's virgin smile, < (what? This doesn't make sense.) ...

Aww, everyone else said what I wanted to say. I didn't even know it was you, I was just interested by the title! *stars!* Wait, it's 'Like' now... what are ...

**so my classmate constructed a story and asked me to write about it. it's in my notebook, and i'm down to chapter fourteen, but i guess i'll have to post ...