Hello brokestarvingwriter,
This poem has humor and is interesting.
I could not spot any mistakes in grammar, and the rhyming was mostly consistent throughout the poem. However, I do not understand one part of it:
Grandma climbed a tree and refused to come down.
She was tired of her kids always clowning around.
She was sick of being ignored and being put down,
so she climbed up a tree and said,"I'll never come down!"
She'd given birth to three kids.
She never shouted or hit.
Now they forget she exists,
and she's alone on Christmas.
One day she stood up to shout,
"It's over! I'm out!"
leaving no doubt
what she was shouting about.
Now she's up in a tree,
ignoring her families pleas.
They're down on their knees,
but it's too late for sorrys.
The reporters came; they all made a scene.
All the neighbors came too- they all wanted to see.
They decided that that was a good place to be,
so they all went and found their own tree.
One day Grandma thought about it and found
that her kids were still always clowning around.
They were still being ignored and being put down, In this line you have put "They were still..." I think you meant to put she was instead of "they were".
so she packed up her things and moved back down to the ground.
Otherwise, it was nicely done. I enjoyed it.
-BahadorS
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