Published February 20, 2010
It was a pale green grassy patch with little critters and flowers moving around and
blowing with the wind. The field was deserted with her being the only exception. She wore
an olive green dress and a bundle of black hair shielded her face from the blaring sun
penetrating her dark brown skin. She laid on the ground unconscious for hours lying there
with thoughts pondering through her mind.
How did I end up here? Where am I? Does no one see me? Am I that far away from civilization? Who brought me here? Why can I not remember anything?
This is pretty random but i really felt as if I had to post this.
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Good Morning/Afternoon/Evening/Night(whichever one it is in your part of the world),
Hi! I'm here to leave a quick review!!
Anyway let's get right to it,
Well this is certainly one of the somewhat more abstract prologue that I've managed to run into here on this site. I don't believe I've managed to get to anything of quite this nature too many times before and it just seems ever so mysterious and oddly unique here. This is certainly not the first time i've seen this premise in a prologue before, but the way that you've presented it here feels quite a bit more unique than this sort of thing often is and that makes for a very intriguing scene I think.
Overall, despite it being kind of on the more random end of the spectrum as far as being mysterious and being a little vague goes, I honestly think this piece works quite well as a prologue. It is teetering right on that line where despite being pretty vague, it is actually interesting enough that at least I find myself really wanting to read on and find out more on what happens next here and well, I'd say that means this prologue certainly manages to accomplish its goal as a prologue.
Aaaaand that's it for this one.
As always remember to take what you think was helpful and forget the rest.
Stay Safe
Harry
Thanks for your critiques and tips this will help me a lot. I will edit my prologue and add more, and again THANK YOU!(P.S Durriedog you weren't nagging
)
Yes, it was very random to post this as it is not a full prolouge. In all, a nice little peice, short but sweet. I'd like to see more, please?
If you need anything, PM me! Please keep writing!
~Durr
I thought this was really good - a lovely idea. I'm really glad you posted it.
This could do with a bit more polishing, but it is a very nice idea. Well done!