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This is very atmospheric and beautiful. It's a brilliant idea, telling a poem from water's perspective. Water must have so much to share about our history as well. The rhyming ...

Hey Erika, I was glad to see that this chapter was more fleshed out than the last. I have to admit I still don't know where the story starts. The ...

Hello Erika, I read this and I've looked over what others have stated and I have to agree with what they've said. Overall, it's competent writing, but it feels like ...

Niebla, this is now my favorite poem that I've ever read on this site. I love the line " “I see, I know,” I saw, I knew, it’s all the ...

This reminded me of William Blake's "To See a World in a Grain of Sand" - one of my favorite poems. I enjoy the structure of the poem, as well ...

ArtStyx, this is a good start to a very sensitive subject that can be difficult to execute well. Overall, I think you do a pretty good job of showing emotional ...

EnderFlash, I really enjoyed this story. The conversation is strained because of the two seemingly conflicting viewpoints. Each generation has to deal with the world changing in ways they never ...

Noelle, this is some nice, simple and clean writing. It was an easy and enjoyable read. I noticed a few places where utilizing the active voice would yield to some ...

CaptainSaltWater, this is a well written, creepy, and vengeful story poem. It's like reading the backstory of a villain. This is how the MC became the way they are. Structurally, ...

Waterlily, this is a well written retelling of Little Red Riding Hood. The story arc is well thought out and competently executed. It had me in mind of Once Upon ...

Morrigan, this is a powerful poem that says so much about our society's obsession with the trivial. I love how evocative the title "An Experiment in Stripping Paint" is, and ...

Hi RedRozeNinja First of all, I just want to say that you have such cool names for your characters. I love Kurai Darknight. You started this second chapter so beautifully ...

Hi RedRozeNinja, This prologue and first chapter gave me a lot to think about. But first I want to say that this a very interesting, dark and unique idea that ...

Hi Dragon Slayer. I think this story has a lot of potential. Overall, it is well written and has a complete, well-thought out plot which carries through from start to ...

Hello NeoAceofAll, This is a very interesting premise. In particular, I like your description of the Legion of Light. However, I have to say that even as a prologue this ...