Dokidokirin

This was a really fun read. I felt a bit out of the loop at first- why is she walking and where is she headed? Who is she? Why is ...

Ah, curses! That cliff hanger! This is really amazing, and I see it's gotten a lot of responses so to be brief: My only beef with this is that the ...

I’m no special girl, I’m shy and many people in my grade don’t know what to think of me. Sigh some would say I am pretty with my long wavy ...

There were a lot of things I wanted to point out, but I see that the above poster has already done so. I will say that the opening is a ...

I agree that it's confusing in the sense that we're not sure who is speaking, why they're speaking, or who they are speaking to. I like that it begins as ...

Truly awesome poem. The part about cruelty in her pores really snagged me, and the line about the picture smashing into the wall. hat line came up so suddenly, it ...

Definitely a cute, funny poem. The idea is fantastic, but there are two things that really stick out. One is the inconsistent rhyming scheme, which as you read on becomes ...

I think the two poems combined works great. First it describes a girl, then she's being protected. It's very sweet. There are a few jarring lines here and there, such ...

There are definitely a few confusing bits in this poem. For starters, flowers clouding breath. Being a child and knowing of winters long past is also a tad confusing, (as ...

First off, this is a very very cute poem. Something you might see on a Christmas card. The only thing that sticks out is the "flicker lights" bit. I'm thinking ...

This was lovely- it has both the positive and the negative aspects of winter, first described as pretty and glittering, then as cold and, my favorite word you used, "attacking." ...

Loved it. :) Only beefs with this are the lines 2 and 5. Line 2 has a sort of awkward comma in it. It would actually read as one straight, ...