DisturbedDisorder

Hey there~ This was really short and didn't really get into the feelings of undying love. Really all there was was a few metaphors, but no real feelings. It would ...

Hey there!~ Okay, so I'll start by saying that I loved it! The emotion was really strong and through the whole thing I was imagining like a broken hearted girl ...

Hey, So I have a couple of things to say. First (and this is probably just me), but I feel like your trying too hard to add details, especially in ...

Heeeeello there :) This is really good! I was only able to find a few grammatical errors, and they were things that were probably just missed when you edited. Napalmerski ...

Hi, I'm DisturbedDisorder! Okay, so I really hope you don't hate me for saying this, and I hope you understand that we all have our own opinions, and I'm not ...

Hey, I guess I'll be reviewing ^^ So, the first thing I want to say, is that this might have been better if it had been divided into sections. It ...

So, you reviewed one of my pieces, so I'll do my best with yours :) First of all, let me start off by saying that I love stories with goblins ...

I'm not trying to mean here, but it could really use a lot of work. First of all, you should build up the character a bit, and get the reader ...

The comment before already took care of the spelling and grammatical errors, so I won't bother with that. Here's everything that I thought.... The stared to shake Drake dropped the ...

Hey! So, I guess I'll start with the negatives first, like the person before. Just like the person before said, the prologue reveals too much. Already I'm guessing that this ...

I kind of want to say Blue Moon from the Immortals series, but...yeah, I'll say that it is the worst. The first book in the series, Evermore, was amazing. I ...

Like the two people before me said, I would pay attention to check it before you post it. It could even help to have someone else check it to make ...

You described her pain very well. It's a really sad story, but realistic and it makes me want to grab my older brother and give him a big hug (although ...

This chapter is really short and cuts off in a kind of awkward place. I would try adding more detail and even describe the characters. Right now I can't really ...