DevilBeMyDarling

First off, masterful use of italics and I love the font being readable but not basic. (I personally have no idea how to do that on YWS so kudos to ...

First off, I love the pacing of the action in this story! Phenomenal. I see some parallels to the movie "Coco", and I really like the dialogue because it feels ...

This story reminds me vibe-wise of if a Grimm's fairy tail book was crossed with the Salem witch trials, if that makes sense. I especially like the tone of the ...

I think the line breaks really add to the narrative's sad, sort of dejected tone. It really encompasses a neglected child slowly transitioning towards a depressed teen in the form ...

A few things: first is formatting feedback. I'd take out the 'chapter x's because the story flows much better without the addition of the titles and honestly, in my experience, ...

I read the first paragraph and instantly thought wow. Your use of descriptive language is sooo amazing!!!! The vocabulary, chefs kiss! I mean just take a look at the wording ...

Oh wow! That kind of took me by surprise. Firstly, the tone of the story is amazing! almost feels a little past tense, which adds to the overall impact of ...

What an empowering story! Your pacing as an author kept me reading, I couldn't look away. The predicament of the characters truly adds to the sense of urgency within the ...

What a moving narrative! First off, the title drew me in. Second, the author's use of vocabulary certainly elevated and added to the overall effect quite splendidly. The author's use ...

Again today, I have found such an amazing piece of imagery woven into a story. Like poetry, painting a picture in a reader's mind of this simple yet beautiful piece. ...

Oh wow..... Never have I ever seen such story that transitioned so abruptly from what seems to be a person just enjoying the beauty in the simple things of the ...

This has some real potential!!!! Your rhyme scheme's phenomenal, and the concept is hilarious, genuinely! I mean, assassinate, mandated by a neighbour state, it did escalate...That's talent. Same with

Just want to say this is soo good. In the modern day world, there are so many unrealistic expectations for women in life, just existing and living the same as ...

Oh is this a full on novel? I love Greek mythology, and think you did an excellent job portraying them! Hopefully I can scroll all the way back to read ...

This is actually a really interesting concept! From my experiences, it doesn't actually matter much about the length as long as it has substance. I think being a writer is ...