Young Writers Society

Wow.

I am asking this question strictly for the sake of curiosity, and you 100% don't have to answer, but how long have you been writing poetry? This piece feels very realized—the rhythm, style, and vocabulary choices come together very nicely. Personally, it left me with a very haunted feeling, like this poem is about something deeper (unless I'm reading too far deep into it). It makes me think of true crime cases involving hitchhikers.

I have to say, too, that your use of imagery is killer; "I’m not actually sure he’s an angel. . . maybe he’s just an apparition/Like a vulture/Some phantom, drinking cheap beer, and waiting to steal our delusions for its own" and "In a wasteland, constantly moving, the angel tearing itself to bloody ribbons/With its own smile, and screaming bloody hell and hate/This angel is dead for sure/Cuz this angel is us-the dead-roaders, eternally damned, road-kill" are two very, very strong lines.

The rhythm is solid. The tone is somewhat bleak but the poem itself is breathtaking. You did beautifully on this piece. I'm excited to read more! Well done!

What a moving narrative!
First off, the title drew me in. Second, the author's use of vocabulary certainly elevated and added to the overall effect quite splendidly.
The author's use of descriptive language, especially when describing the ribs poking through parchment and the comparison to road kill, wastelands, apparitions... They certainly did a wonderful job with making the reader feel a sense of pity and intensity from the descriptions of in particular the setting and predicament depicted.
All in all I really loved this piece!