Demoness

This is beautiful. I can't really put my finger on why! But it really clicked with me. It started out a little dull I must admitt, just words telling a ...

Hallow, Demoness here to give you a little advice :) This is an interesting piece. It has got some colorful lines and curious twist to it. Allthough I agree with ...

Wuups, sorry Heather didn't mean to post it here xD

Hellue, Demon here I like the message you're trying to deliver here and I think you made that part very clear, I also agree with the previous speaker - awesome ...

Hellue, Demon here I like the message you're trying to deliver here and I think you made that part very clear, I also agree with the previous speaker - awesome ...

Simple but Sweet! This was pretty awesome, not much imagery but still alot of emotion, nice job! My only nitpick is that you should add some punctuation to aid the ...

Hellue again! I like the imrovement! This line is more powerful, yet I still feel it's a bit long but I guess it'll have to do, shorten it down and ...

They don't belong together, each text in bold is a title for the piece to come! That might explain the choppiness! :P

No you're right! It's supposed to be "passed" I read it as.. like he was trying to get over something that had happened earlier... I donno what I was thinking ...

Heey again, I'm sure others will see that too! Yeh, I like the colours because they remind me of a grapefruit... but I don't like them since they make it ...

Aoow, this is like the fifth time I've read it.. It just make me so happy! It's so very, very funny! I just had to say that again and that ...

Hey Tyy! What happened! When I stopped bugging you about posting.. you stopped posting! I need ya to keep the good work up girl! How can I live if I ...

Yeesh. SHAME ON ME, this is horrible.. I must either erase or fix it up immidiately!! Thanxx for the reviews anyhows :D

Haha, this is a turn of event.. I thought my post dissappeared when my computer died... turns out there were two posts.. looking just the same. Haha, well now you've ...

Hellie Hallou! My name.. or username or whatever, is Demoness and I'm here to inflict my comments on this piece. I'll begin with saying.. INTERESTING topic! It really is a ...