Demoness

Hm.. overall this was pretty good. But I've got a few things to point out; - Structure, your lines differ too much in length and that disrupt the flow - ...

Okay so this was obviously sad! Yet... I found that the ending was a happy one even though it ended with death, simply because I liked the thought of the ...

Hello, you're only fourteen and still manage to write such intriguing stories! I like the way you express and describe your narrator - you've given him a true personality, meaning ...

This is the exact type and kind of poetry I enjoy reading! Nice structure, amazing rythm and flow and non-forced-rhymes that makes the poem so delightful to read! Very good! ...

Quick, simple and plain but still an enjoyable read. It flowed real well and I've got nothing more than one little nitpick. "Money's spent." I don't think this line fit ...

Hm.. what can I say...... I LOVED IT! Absolutely L O V E:d it! The structure - perfect, the flow, the rythm, impeccable! Okay so there were a few, few, ...

This poem was quite delightful to read, I enjoyed it! It was longing, yet hopeful and just cozy.. if you know what I mean :D I don't have much complaint ...

Hi, I'm the half-crazy Demoness, and here's a little thought of mine! I am quite obsessed with commenting on structures and I want it to be orderly, for there to ...

Oh my! If powerful love what was you were aiming for you've reached your goal! This is so sweet, yet sad but beautiful! It's a little Romeo-and-Juliet feeling over it ...

Heellue you, Megsug made a quite impeccable review and grasped almost every flaw with this so I will only tell you what i like about this; And that is.... The ...

Heey, I really like this poem! I love how you rather keep the text interesting and serence and sacrifice a few primary rhymes to something secondary or just something to ...

Aoow, I'm stunned! It's something really touching about this piece. I have read few things similar to it and I must say I'm quite amazed. Some lines were a bit ...

Aoow, you're writing about the moon aren't you! That's so sweet 'n cute 'n beautiful! I loved it! Great rythm and flow and emotion and all! Amazing!! I can't even ...

So hey! This was quite amazing! Love, love loads of Love to this! It could've contained a bit more imagery perhaps but I still find you grasp the meaning of ...

Helluue, I likes this piece very much! I love you're imagery and the second line with coffe and icecream was just great.. but it would be even better if you ...