Demeter

Hello, monki! This was a sweet poem. Just the typical have-a-good-life-after-I've-left poem for a teacher, which it seems to be. Being a poem like that, the tellingness doesn't really matter, ...

Ew. Haha :) Hello, shanan-cat! Death is my main meal, but your juicy blood is my great desert. Your lifeless liver lays solemnly in a bowl, waiting to be topped ...

Oh, my. This is really sweet. It's also a little sad. I only wish I knew the reason why he won't grow up, and then go save him. I'll try ...

Hey there, casstic! This piece reminded me a little of a diary note or maybe poetry, like a few others have said, too. She made me cry and he called ...

Here, kitty kitty kitty! Haha. :) Ringo, you are not low in the YWS food chain, which doesn't actually even exist. You're the one and only Ringo, and no one ...

Hey, kris! The structure is really interesting, it caught my eye immediately. The title is also pretty. Again, I can imagine you writing this. Maybe it has been raining then? ...

Hello! This is a refreshing piece. I mean, it's so hopeful. I can feel the wind on my face. Say a farewell to boundaries, None exist for the free. I ...

Hello, kris! It flowed well in the beginning, but in the second stanza the rhythm broke somehow. I should bite my tongue 'till i loose all taste. I believe it's ...

Hello! There is a lyrics forum, too, did you know that? :) I can't decide what to do with this, because as you know, the original idea isn't yours, and ...

Hello! It was okay, but I would've wanted more emotion in it, too. I hope soon he does This wording is funny. "Soon" should be in the end, I think. ...

Hello, again! Give me a place of solitude; a place where I can think. Make a haven of agreement where eternal peace can be found. Make me a refuge of ...

Wow. A good one. I can imagine that this has just poured from your head, I can feel the emotion and the passion that you've probably gone through while writing ...

Hello! I think this is rather good. A bit too short for my taste, but not bad at all. The meaning is sweet and it says quite a lot without ...

Hello! I enjoyed reading this. I like your poems. Nothing left in what your saying, Your all but done in talking, Shouldn't it be "you're" in these? threadbear, Threadbare, I ...

Hello! I'd suggest you divide this into stanzas or then make some lines longer, some shorter. You have awfully long lines there, followed by very short ones, so that doesn't ...