Demeter

Hi there, PaintedSmile! Welcome to YWS :) I’ll give you some chronological comments first and then some other impressions! He crept towards the edge of the woods,his ice-blue eyes dilating ...

Hi Sarah12! Welcome to YWS! Well, that was certainly a violent beginning! It makes me want to know what on earth is going on, why everything is on fire, why ...

Hi magpie! I thought this was beautiful. Some notes: I wondered whether you had "spring" in both the first and second stanza intentionally. If so, I hope the one in ...

Hi magpie! What a strong subject indeed! Well done for writing about it. The stanzas about the signs and the judging people were really interesting, because at first I thought ...

Hello kymorhens! After your introduction said something about a dystopia, and the chapter begins with her doing some training, I was quite easily reminded of the Hunger Games and Divergent ...

Hey there Ilovewriting! Welcome to YWS :) The title drew me in, because what's not to love about makeup! I agree with Iggy that you should explain what the fx ...

Hey lakegirls! You have the honour of being my first review in a long while. ;) I’ll give you chronological notes as I read along. :) My other hand carried ...

Hi there! I'm sorry in advance if this review sounds like I disliked the story, because I didn't! But there were some bits that I thought needed improvement, and they ...

Hi Pinkie! I'm not sure if you meant to post this profile to be reviewed, but I might as well say a few words now that I'm here! I really ...

Hi there Kelpies! Firstly, I think that this is not meant to be in the Scripts forum as it obviously isn't a script! Let me know where you meant to ...

Hi there, Markontheworld! I'll start by pointing out some little things I found! Firstly, be careful of homonyms (things that sound the same or almost the same but are spelled ...

Hey rhiasofia! I really liked this! It read so well and smoothly and it made me feel quite peaceful. A couple of little thoughts: I know that normal rules of ...

Hey, icannothearthings! A fellow Salsa member ;) Firstly, I have to ask: does the script not go on after page 6? I was sure my Google Drive was being silly, ...

Hey there Annapurna! I hope I can make some sense into this review even though I haven’t read any of the other parts (if you’ve posted any). I’ll try to ...

Hey Jazzydracula! :D This was really fun! And wow - you like a lot of things ;) Ooh, before I go on, if you remember/can find out who did the ...