Demeter

Hi, Halycon! Here as you requested! Actually, pretty much the only thing I wanted to point out was the listed adjectives, but Evi got there first. =D I didn't mind ...

Hey, Deepti! As if to nod in appreciation of the scene so serene, This line has so many syllables and small words (along with a very big word), it's quite ...

Hello, KJ. At first I have to admit I didn't find the poem very interesting. It had some nice imagery from the beginning, but it seemed to be like so ...

Hi, Pudin! Here by request. :) I like the dialogue idea. If you wanted to carry it out more smoothly, you could have her lines in cursive, or something like ...

Hey, Gal. I liked the first stanza a lot before the rhythm/pattern/flow, broke. The personification of death is quite boring, though I like how you made it female. I haven't ...

Hey, Jame! Freedom for the free of mind; doorways of the rhyme. Ebbing seas of memory beneath a violent gust of lust, Both of the lines in bold disturb the ...

Hi Kayla! The beginning was possibly my favourite bit in this poem, although maybe it was the repetition that made it seem like lacking something. Also, I couldn't help thinking ...

Hey there, Anzius -- here by request, even though this is a bit old! Also, sorry for making you wait. So, I liked how you managed to have me overall ...

Hey, Topie! The rhymes and the rhythm in this poem work overall very well. Rhyming poetry has the certain sort of togetherness that I like but find quite difficult to ...

Hey, NaRachel! First of all, it would be nice if you pointed out the choruses, verses, bridges and other parts of the song. I'm pretty sure what the chorus is, ...

Hey, Howler! Well, I quite liked the extraordinary point of view, and I'm glad you were given that prompt. The biggest problems I had with this were the occasionally uneven ...

Hi, Greyed! I've always liked clocks and ticking as images. It reminds me of Poe for some reason. Some of the longer lines you have there break the rhythm and ...

Hey, Juggalette! Are these quotes by you? It would be good if you cleared that up. Just, you know, put "[quote] -- xXJuggaletteXx", so we can be sure. There's a ...

Hi, Herzing! I really like the opening line. It's very beautiful, and I just hope that the rest of the stanza would be equally strong. Actually, to me it felt ...

Hey Jenna! So I'm finally here -- sorry you've had to wait! - Overall, your style of writing is very balanced and pleasant to read. - The paragraph in the ...