Deanie

Lauren is a believable character, you did a really good job. Couldn't see any mistakes, but I think you need to read through this again carefully. When you write in ...

I lied it. I can understand why Liam feels guilty that its all his fault. I lie how you started with question, what would tell an unborn child about life? ...

I love this writing. I knew what was going to happen, and because of what you wrote at the beginning I thoguht it might be a long letter of information. ...

I love the idea you had here! I can't find any mistakes except one. I will tell you that later. But I just love how Mrac is scared at night ...

Very interesting piece. I would've liked a bit more detail. Why did he kill his son? I understand why he killed himself though. I found your use of words really ...

I can really relate to this. My Grandpa died a while back of cancer. I always am going to miss him, but even through all his pain he still smiled ...

This poem is really straight to the point, and even though it is pretty short, it still shows so much. I love this poem! I think you did a really ...

Hi, AM I liked this piece of writing. I like the title too. I only read it because I was wondering what the title meant. I wanted to use google ...

Wow, strong poetry. I liked the repetition, for those who didn't and did make it. I loved the ending when you stated it for all those people who didn't or ...

Hey Angie! How are you??? Now the poem, which was amazing! I am actually British and not happy that tourists seem to enjoy America more than England (a prejudiced thing.) ...

Loved this just as much as I loved the prologue! The feeling and imagery there was amazing! I loved how your prologue was so nice and short and how this ...

Wow. So much emotion and depth in this poem. I could really relate as well because I recently went through a period where I felt very small and alone... I ...

Wow, this poem is so deep. I felt like crying after reading it, seriously I did. I didn't though. I just sighed really loudly. I was a little unsure of ...

One of the shortest prologues I have ever read, but I think probably my favourite. To me, it was almost like a really short poem. I loved the first two ...

Looking forward to chapter 7!!! Awaiting anxiously! I liked this chapter, a bit sudden about the change of view. Maybe at the beginning of the chapter you could put Astor's ...