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Deanie
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Deanie wrote a review · Sun Sep 18, 2011 2:28 pm

This poem is really straight to the point, and even though it is pretty short, it still shows so much. I love this poem! I think you did a really great job, the rhyme flowed effortlessly and did't disturb the flow which I find is an important talent to have when writing. I love your righting style by the way. And the last line summed it up so well:

Amazingpoet07 wrote:happiness is just my shield.


My favourite verse is:
Amazingpoet07 wrote:looking at all the happiness you gain,
ignoring all of my pain,


Really great job!

Deanie x

the awesomest short poem..,i have ever heard or read...!!the last line of the poem is very inspiring and beautiful..,,"happiness is my shield"..!!i bet it is..!!
good luck...,you're awesome..!!

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LindsayG
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This is the shortest yet most beautiful short poem i've ever come across. You said so much in so little words...I've got to learn how to do that!
I loved the message of the poem and i love how it just hinges right on the point...its most relationships summed up.

Definite thumbs up!
Keep writing...



The worst bullies you will ever encounter in your life are your own thoughts.
— Bryant McGill