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Hi Andrea, Secretly I've continued following this through and I guess now it's time for me to get reviewing it! As a recap of the previous two chapters and this ...

Back again! I am getting more of what separates the Fandolians from the Septonians. I can start to see a relationship building here. It was more of a peaceful description ...

Hi there GoonerGirl, Another nice bit! This prologue is shaping up to be pretty long though! When will it start turning into chapters? I don't think prologues should be this ...

Hey there, I don't watch Gossip Girl so I basically am just going to review this as if it was it's own. Also, you don't need to resubmit anything! If ...

Hi Barbara, This looks very interesting. You've got a great idea here, and I'm sure it's going to make a great story. As beginnings go, this was good. You've set ...

Hi Emm, This is a good beginning to the story. As a reader I can really understand and connect to Bonnie as a character, and I'm sure many readers can ...

Hey there! Since ImHero has already talked to you about grammar and spelling, I think I will stick to talking about the message. I felt like this belonged more in ...

Hi Rishabh, This was interesting. It left me wondering what it is that Ratan did that left him feeling this way - so lost and alone. It makes a good ...

Hi there ChubakaWooky, I read this piece without reading the first part to it. I'm sorry :) But as a stand alone poem it does very good as well. It ...

Hi Andrea, This was a really good beginning. You've got a nice personal style that's all your own, and I liked it! It had a nice beginning, middle, and ending ...

Hi there Deanz, This is a nice statement, that has a good meaning behind it. But as a piece this is rather short. I think you're talking about what makes ...

Hi NooneImportant, I liked this short story. You've got a very interesting idea you're toying here with. World War III is a really big subject. I think that was a ...

Hi Cj2344 I liked this. It had great symbolism in there, what with the handbag and carrying thing around. I really like how you even started off from when we ...

Well, let's try again shall we? I liked the meaning behind this poem. I can see how it strongly connects with your essay. I can even recognize some phrases! :) ...

Hi Secrete, I am going to be really strict with this and I hope you don't mind. I'm sure you can take it though, right ^^ There was one little ...