Note:
FOUND POEM
1. Reread your Research Paper looking for 50-100 words that stand out to you about
your current career choice.
2. Copy your selected 50-100 words from your Research Paper document and paste
then into a new Pages document.
3. Next, review your list and cut any dull or unnecessary words. Reduce your original
list by 1/2.
4. Think about your feelings and ideas about your current career choice. What tone
(think attitude) do you want to express about those ideas? Make sure you have the
words to convey your ideas and feelings.
5. You may change order, tense, punctuation, possessives, capitlaization & plurals to
make the words fit together sensibly.
6. If you ABSOLUTELY need to add a word that did not come from the original text,
you may add ONLY 2!
7. Space and arrange the words so they are in a poem-like format:
*Use principles of enjambment to. . .
--arrange words so they make a rhythm you like
--space words out so they are all alone
or allruntogether
--put
words
on lines by
themselves
--emphasize words by playing with boldface, italics or different font sizes
8. Place your name at the bottom of the poem & a title for your poem at the top.
I already posted my research paper. The only extra word I added was requires. I decided to do a free verse poem, so no particular rhythm is in my poem... Hope you enjoy it!
Writing
Creating new worlds,
creating new characters.
Just expressing ideas,
it's thrilling.
Writers are people,
people that get
inspiration.
They basically create
the written word,
using inspiration,
and ideas.
Writing is a brutal job.
It requires effort,
effort to achieve.
It requires love,
love to writing.
It requires inspiration,
it is everywhere,
spreading like a wild fire.
No one starts
at the top.
Writing is so much more
than pencil to paper.
Fingers to keys.
Writers have to be wise.
Wise with thoughts
and wise with ideas.
So writing is my fairly tale.
Writing is my dream.
It was my love,
from the start.
Writing is the best
job to me.
But if you want to write,
understand this.
No one starts at the top.
Dream big,
but start out small.
By Brianna.
Hello. jordin here with a review fro you being my mentee I need to do a review on as much of your work as I can.
First I have no idea what the stuff at the beginning is, I mean I am not sure what it is...
Next Something that I would advise is to make each paragraph four lines long.
Also coppying what other writers wrote well it is not quite right on YWS.
Try harder and you will do better, not saying this is bad.
Keep writing and good job.
~Jon~
Well, let's try again shall we?
But this doesn't really fit into a poem for me. I wouldn't comment on the layout as Speakerskat has already done that. I agree with the choppiness a bit. But I'm going to focus on the more poetry type of aspect.
I liked the meaning behind this poem. I can see how it strongly connects with your essay. I can even recognize some phrases!
It kind of lacked emotion :/ (sorry I'm being strict again. It's probably just today) I didn't really feel like I could lose myself in this poem. I felt distant and kind of stale, like I was just reading this simple piece. It needs more imagination. When you say "writing is so much more than pencil to paper", it is a simple line, but from that you can take on so much more. You kind of leave that line there, but I would put more.
Writing is so much more than pencil to paper,
It is like you inking your heart onto a sheet,
Or losing yourself into a spiral of letters,
Until it all gathers and forms a new creation.
To me that sounds much more beautiful, and meaningful. And that only comes from one of your lines! Look into this poem and see what you can do with someone of the great line openers you have there. If you have a good idea going on in a sentence, don't leave it there, continue it! Your story needs to be told!
Lastly I will badger you about the word choice. You reuse words too much. Like how I saw "wise", "writing" and "inspiration" too much. Maybe if you apply my first suggestion, about line openers, you will see that these words don't repeat so much. If they do, it seriously doesn't hurt to use a thesaurus, or even an online one. Synonyms are awesome! Same meaning, written differently. All a writer could ask for
This is where I stop tearing apart your work. Don't get me wrong, it was good. But I see potential there to be even better! If you're into poetry, I also advise you to visit here. It's all about poetry and there are many people who are willing to help you out. I think you might like it
That's it for now. Keep aspiring for those dreams and keep writing all the while. Practice will never make perfect, but it can make you pretty close!
Deanie x
Hi there again Secrete,
I liked the meaning behind this again. I can see how it connects strongly with your essay. I can even recognize some phrases!
So this posted before I had even properly started! Let me try again without pressing some random keys with my hand
Hey there Speakerskat here to review for ya!
Loved the poem!
My review
~Kat
JK! Heres my real review
I really did love this poem. I didnt read all the bold stuff at the top though and I don't like how they devided their sentences like that, it made it sort of short and choppy and detached from the nice meaning and flow of the poem. I do totally love this poem though (sorry for saying that a lot). I mean it's soooooo true that we writer start at the bottom and that it isnt an easy task and takes a very educated and devoted person.
Really lovely
~Kat