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Hello there sbitonti, This poem was okay. It was neat, with a nice layout and it had good symbolism there. You tied together the beach and things about the beach ...

Hi Wicked, Well, now that I've read them both I think my review can go into a bit more detail. I like the idea you have here, and it's building ...

Hi Wicked, I must agree, this story has potential. Something must go wrong if everyone knows exactly how many heartbeats they have left. I see this story maybe falling under ...

Hello TheClosetKidnapper, What an interesting opening to a story! I like the idea of someone having no identity, and I know that whatever they get into they will continue searching ...

Hey there, A nice poem indeed. I think you've got lovely description in here which really shapes the emotion you're trying to convey. May favourite lines must be the last ...

Back again :) Thank you for another enjoyable chapter. The action was good and well paced, and the plot just keeps on moving along. You've got good description about what's ...

Hey darkangel, So usually I don't review lyrics :3 But I'm trying it out anyways! I really like how you told a story with this song... I got the image ...

Hey Matt! This is a good beginning to the story! There was nothing lacking in detail at all :) You've really mastered the rule of "show not tell". I really ...

Hey Dragonrider! I haven't read the first part of the story, but this on it's own was already interesting. I liked how it was detailed enough, and we as readers ...

Hi Sarah, I know I haven't read the previous chapters of this story, so I can't focus on the story much because I don't have the full background of it. ...

Hi Carddragon, I like this song. It has a lot of love emotion in it, very romantic lyrics. The layout is a bit odd which sort of put me off ...

Hey Carddragon, This song is good. I feel like you've really got the essence of knights and what they stand for in here. I liked the repeat of words at ...

Hey Skins :D I do like this chapter, dare I say. It seems like the beginning of understanding Zack a whole lot more. I liked how she has all these ...

Hi qmj, I like this poem and I can see the emotion you put into it. I can see you chose words carefully and I liked how you brought action ...

Hey there Wildwildcat, I like the idea behind this story. I can see action and lots of drama in the future, and plenty of it in this chapter already. It's ...