Darren_Shan_Fan

Thanks for all your comments. I've taken in what you've all said and I've created a story similar to this one but a lot longer. Hopefully I will post it ...

Wow Shelley that was amazing! I never knew you wrote poems and that was a really good poem. Sorry if that sounded a bit rude. Jess

thanks.. :D

Okay thanks guys and sorry if it anoyed you. I should have spent more time on it but im deffinetly goin to edit it and post the new one. :P ...

Yea good point :P Thanks for the comment you are right im not even sure if this is the beginning of the story or the ending its just an idea ...

Thanks for the comment. Sorry about the mistake I was in a rush But thanks for the tip :P

A really interesting story the first cupple of sentences were a bit boring but it was deffintily worth the wait!!!

Good story, funny too. Desperate to know what happens next to Ava.

Wow this story is really good!!! You discribed everything really well so that the reader could emphasise what the character is feeling. Even though it wasnt that long those words ...