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Re: deleted
Okay, so this is a good start. It got my attention with the action and seemed interesting. It's another dystopia--all the rage, those--but it does seem to be, at least, ...
May 11, 2012 -
Re: The Raven's Call
Um, sorry to be harsh, but I have absolutely no idea what is going on in this piece. It's all jumbled together and some of the action seems out of ...
May 11, 2012 -
Re: A Part Of Me
One word: Gorgeous. Now, admittedly for the second time today, I'm going to have to be a "bad" reviewer. I can't say much more than I really liked this and ...
May 11, 2012 -
Re: Why
Okay, hi, your friendly reviewer here. Now, I'm going to give you some tips, okay? First off, this is not a normal structure for poetry. A poem tends to go ...
May 11, 2012 -
Re: And when you wake, you'll know
Okay, so. I'm going to be a "bad" reviewer and basically just say I love this. I mean, really. I generally dislike unusual lowercase in poetry (I know, I know, ...
May 11, 2012 -
Re: Alexandra - Chapter 1
Okay, so. This is, well, cliche. Sorry, not trying to be rude or mean, but it does have some pretty big issues. I'll say, though, that I did like the ...
May 7, 2012 -
Re: Cold Fire
Nice job keeping rhyme scheme. Always a little impressed with that. It definitely gave it a beat. However, the actual substance of the poem is a little confusing to me. ...
May 7, 2012 -
Re: Light Child
Um, okay. So, I was looking for short stories with interesting names and yours caught my interest. Unfortunately, I've noticed, eh, a couple of problems. 1. It all runs together. ...
May 2, 2012 -
Re: Easy Shame
Holy heck. o.o Well, that was--intense. Surprising. Interesting. Now I want to know more. Seriously, this could be a preface or prologue. Admittedly, it stands alone fine--but, unlike in response ...
Apr 13, 2012 -
Re: Elven Sword Fight
Very interesting piece. I liked the sword-fighting description quite a bit--I'm a sucker for action, since I'm more of a literary elements and deep conversations sort of writer. However, there ...
Apr 13, 2012 -
Re: Prolouge: Untitled
Interesting. A story about a psychic, I assume? Could be curious. I like the opening style. Sort of eerie, almost. However, some points are a bit fuzzy--practice writing your action ...
Feb 24, 2012 -
Re: The Vanity of the Rose (Chapter One- To Be Named Later)
First Response: Interesting. Would probably keep reading. However, cliches. Red hair. /Curly/ red hair. (Not normally bothersome--I like red hair--but recently so-many-red-haired-people-in-YA. Just FY
Feb 11, 2012 -
Re: A tale of an automaton
First impression (based off first paragraph): Catches me pretty good. I like how it starts in media res. I get a feel for the character from how I see Lady ...
Oct 12, 2011 -
Re: two crescent moons 1.1
Nice job! While I don't exactly have much sympathy for the characters yet (but I'm probably some sort of emotionless weirdo, so don't mind me), I really want to read ...
Sep 26, 2011 -
Re: Owlkit's Beginning
Hey! I quite liked this. Of course, my bias, since I'm still a pretty strong Warriors fan, could be totally showing, but so far it seems interesting. I'm already interested ...
Sep 25, 2011
