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I liked the brutal rawness of this piece for its honesty and, well, I can relate. However, relation doesn't mean I shouldn't critique. As it were, your imagery often became ...

'Kay. Your friendly reviewer, Cas, is here to offer you suggestions! I have read a, ahem, series of poems quite like this one (literature is my vice?). Basically, fruit rather ...

Hello. I have to say, I agree with Ben. It "is a very emotive piece"; unfortunately, it seems full of overkill, dramatization. Then again, I'm a picky person when it ...

Okay. I read this and I'm intrigued, but also saddened. You might want to include a trigger warning. While I know it does sort of 'give it away', it's good ...

Hey! Cas here to review. First of all, this needs a good old proof-read, man. Some of the lines don't end properly, some punctuation is off, and there are still ...

Okay. I'm engrossed with this story, admittedly. I love the rhythm of it, something you captured through repetition of ideas, of themes, etc. It reminded me of a dance. Nonetheless, ...

Oooh, I'm loving this so much. Then again, I'm a big fan of mysteries, especially (British) murder mysteries. When you mention the Black Forest, do you mean the one in ...

Lovely poem. I really got your sense of feeling. It was emotive and descriptive, perfect for a narrator. I don't have much in the way of concrit other than maybe ...

I enjoyed this. It was simplistic and nice. However, I think it could've easily been more. What you lack here is description/interesting words and a feeling of suspense. The whole ...

I found the rhythm of this piece oddly soothing despite its topic. I believe this was because of the steady repetition you used. If you intended something other than this, ...

Okay. Much love. This poem captures something that I've come into rather recently. That is, almost everyone around me seems so perfect that it's like they're angels and I'm some ...

Bloody 'ell that's gorgeous. I apologize for not offering you anything amazing in return, but I can't even think of a way to change it for the better. I mean, ...

I'd have to say I seriously like this. You managed much more structure than I normally can manage. -winces- On the other hand, that structure sometimes restrained the full meaning ...

Okay. All in all, I enjoyed the foreword. On occasion, I grew confused about who was who, but, in general, I liked it. Of course, there's a major problem with ...

I like how you managed this piece, even if you didn't go full out e. e. cummings and only capitalized the I's. That sort of bothered me a bit, but ...