Crysi

I love this! Very creative. The first stanza is like coming home, and the second is like leaving it... Or contrasting a "normal" home with an "upside-down" home. Very awesome. ...

Wow. I like this. The first thing I noticed was your switch between present tense and past tense, and I really like the effect it creates. Obviously past tense creates ...

I have a hard time not cracking up, only because my friends and I have a very... "interesting" inside joke about chess. *ahem* I'll try to put it aside for ...

Teehee. That was very amusing. I kept looking for the onomatopoeia, and I wondered why you called it that if there was only one. :P Very cute though. Sounds like ...

Wow. I'm very impressed. This is one of your best poems by far. I... have no criticism. Although the writer in me has not been gagged and is now shouting ...

Lovely, Jack, as always. Ooh! Ooh! I have a criticism! Lol. Minor thing, really: of your lips seems timeless in the infinite mornings we spent lying-in (each other's embrace) and ...

*laughs* Too bad you erased your blog... Do you know how many times you complained about not having a life? :lol: That's brilliant. Anyway, I remember I really liked this ...

Very nicely done! :) At first I was afraid I wouldn't like the switch in length in the lines moon hippy crazy child novocaine induced but after reading it again, ...

I like everything but the last line. Maybe if I read it tomorrow I'll like it more, but it seems almost TOO dramatic, which makes it a little corny. Maybe ...

I agree... It really doesn't flow well. The first two stanzas sound like something out of Dr. Seuss (no offense) and are too lighthearted for the topic. I really like ...

I loved the Amulet of Samarkand!! I absolutely love the writing, and Bartimaeus is hilarious. I'm working on the second book now... Actually, that's a lie. I started it during ...

I do! That book is actually one of my all-time favorites. I liked it so much that my English teacher bought me a copy for Christmas. While it seemed cliche ...

Jack, I just don't like your rhyming poems nearly as much as when you just go for it, you know? Although I did like the line "clouding jaded apologies and ...

Wow. You are very good at poetry, lol. Usually I don't like pieces about unicorns and such, because few are well-written. However, you made the subject mature and innocent at ...

*laughs* I love this!! Very cool. Very nice idea. My only complaint is the last line - it just doesn't work for me... I'm not sure why. Maybe because it ...