Crysi

I wrote a parody of bad poetry once. To be honest, it sounded very similar to this. Basically, it's a good idea, and we've all felt it before, but... that's ...

*sigh* Brad... I keep getting the feeling that this has happened before. Like, every "episode" is the same. Jonathon and Kyle fight, Jonathon gets all pissy/emo, Kyle ends up with ...

...I had a bloody post here, and it left me. Anyway. Don't interrupt Jonathon's dialogue with Kyle's actions - you do it a few times. There's a long string of ...

Brad, I really don't like the end when he starts crying. He's a crybaby throughout this whole thing, it seems, and it just doesn't fit his character to me. Or ...

So, basically, because you have about a million and two of these, I'll just be pointing out things that could be improved. I was confused at first about what was ...

Well, it's certainly... erm... interesting... I'm assuming it's meant to be completely nonsensical, and thus, you shall get a completely nonsensical critique. Or, rather, you would if I could manage ...

...WOW. Normally I don't venture into the Non-Fiction forums - I generally read to get away from reality, you know? But... wow. This was fantastic. I love how you maintain ...

Amazing, Imp. In fact, Saphirus has agreed to back off for quite some time now, just because you posted this. ;) There are a few minor blips, like one or ...

Catalina looked up at the young man beside her. His grey eyes held wisdom far beyond his seventeen years. His blond hair moved with the wind as if it had ...

I really like this, too. :) It's a simple, sweet message of that Miracle. My only comment is that the second line doesn't seem to flow with the rhythm as ...

Greenjackets “Dieu ne pas pour le gros battalions, mais pour sequi teront le meilleur.” – Voltaire (God is not on the side of the big battalions, but of the best ...

Wow. I tried to read this a few times, and after about the fifth time I think I actually got through it. It made me feel really jumpy and took ...

Wow. Okay, so I was really tired last night when I read this, and I decided I'd critique it today. I actually ended up having a dream about your story... ...

Okay, I admit - I clicked on this piece because of an inside thing I have with my group. See, there are four of us, and somehow we became the ...

Hmm... I like this. I can read it two different ways - from the eyes of the volunteers, or from the eyes of an outside specatator. I like how you ...