Critiq

It's good, first off. You don't see present tense that often nowadays. Extremely boring beginning, though, like you've said. The math is a really, really, bad way to start the ...

Hmm... not sure what I think about this one. Good piece overall. The flashback in the middle was pretty obvious, with the italics, such forth and so on. Watch your ...

Its hard to critique thoughts. But I'll try my best. First off all, I do like this. It's not Earth shattering or even very special but it's quality. But down ...

It's good writing, yes, but I'm afraid its already gone too far into cliche territory. I mean, Bermuda Triangle? Robotic monotone voices? Videos of some guy in terrible danger which ...

It's good (although I can't say good idea because it comes from a book), but there's no conflict or anything to make it interesting. Even the muse-ness falls flat because ...

I must admit, I found that very interesting. The interplay between italics and normal text, 1st person and 3rd person, is very confusing though. If it's dialogue, put it in ...

Hello, world! Okay, so this piece is hardly my style, but I'll try to say something intelligible anyways. First off, I'm no grammar nazi, but this was very bad grammar ...

Just a quick observation: Every other line it seems like the topic has shifted. It sounds like the thoughts of an insane songwriter. Which is cool, but obviously not what ...

Let's take a different slant on this, shall we? This writing is very good, just polish and polish etc etc etc. But your writing falls into a niche I like ...

Ooh. Someone turning the mundane of their life into an undersea utopia. Well, that works! I'm not one for all that waxy, poetic sort of junk, so I'll try to ...

I'll be brief. This work is two halves, both of which are interesting if improved upon a little. The first part, a man dodging patrols to trade with someone else, ...

I'd sum what this piece up as "It happens to all of us. What makes your case so special?" But otherwise, it was still rough. I won't deal with all ...

I'm not going to nit pick. It's not worth it. Because there is something fundamentally wrong with your story. A greatly intelligent man once said "Brevity is the soul of ...

Wow. He talks like someone jumps off the building every other day! Either that or the person is a caricature of sort of all the window watchers through the years, ...

Oh no, Aggie's corrupted another one! Sorry, just read ATTWN in class and I totally despise 'pulp' or 'genre' fiction. I would definitely like to know if there are any ...