Crimsona

Rewrite of an earlier poem. When I was small, you showed the stars -- glittering eyelets against night's endless black sheet. It was then that I wondered what lied beyond ...

Overall I really like this poem and I can't see anything wrong with it. My favourite bits I will colour purple. These girls have always been my weakness. Not one ...

Firstly I'd like to say that I really liked this poem, I like how it's written in 1st person, I haven't seen many good poems on here written in that ...

Oooh, this is a nice poem. (I miss being away from the mountains too D:) I found it a little challenging to read because it was all in one lump, ...

My suggestions are in bold ; Now let us say what we must say ‘Till Death doth take us both away I like this line, it flows well and is ...

Aww this is such a cute poem! The simplicity of it, and it reminds me of my little plush animals.... *stops a moment to let out a happy sigh, then ...

This poem is pretty cute, but there is a lot of room for improvement. The whole poem is a little bit vaigue and doesn't really go anywhere. However, I like ...

Wow, deep, deep. Brilliantly written; I love the repetition of 'The Truth' and how 'The truth' turns to 'They' and 'They' turns to 'We'. Really powerful 'stuff' you've written there. ...

Beautiful poem, loved how you used showing, not telling. The flow was superb, just watch your punctuation, grammer and all that because some of the 'I's were uncapitalised and other ...

Often I wonder, Why is “I love you” so hard to say? Brilliant question Why do we want to hide Another fantastic unanswered question And keep all of our feelings ...

Aww, this is quite a sweet poem. I love the sheer simplicity and quirkiness of it. Nitpick's though; It fills me with a simple joy. (You've used 'it' two lines ...

Wow. Deep, passionate poem you've written there! I really like it (I'm sure your teacher will/did too). Just a few nickpicks; My cuts screaming for savior. 'saviour' Also, the rhyming ...

Aww this is a cute poem. I have no idea what the first comment is talking about, I don't think that you need to 'give away' any more about what's ...

Very cute story and made my day. :) Really good apart from the spelling mistakes pointed out by BlondieMissyAngel. Keep writing because this is great! ;) ~Crim

Wow, lovely poem. The simplicity and gentleness of it is superb. I'm not quite sure how the title relates but it's certainly a fantastic poem. ... my face and hands ...