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Yeah the broken up sentences are supposed to be representing memory flashes. Thank you for your review~!

I trust you, Hermz. And I thought the house scene was pretty good.

I feel like this should be on a shirt. It's not exactly a poem (I think?), but it's pretty darn funny. This would be where I would give you an ...

Crazy here ;) This is great! It sounds like an awesome song, but unfortunately I wasn't born with the best lyrical gene in my musical family, so I can't give ...

Thanks! I didn't have them try to go after him because they are spineless. That's just how I imagined them. :)

Um, I'm just saying, but there isn't a story up. Maybe its just me and I'm going crazy.

I'm not too good with poetry, but it is really good. Its a simple rhyme, and as I read this I thought of children playing hop scotch. The last line ...

Thanks for the advice! I'll get onto it.

What I was going for was sarcasm in the similes; maybe I wasn't clear. The "Shit, where the hell are my shoes" is a thought of the character. The audience ...

I didn't mean to say that it was cheesy. Its really good; I meant that it could be viewed as cheesy, by how fast you jumped into the story. But ...

yeah. You can phrase your work any way you want to.

You just blew my mind. No kidding. My brain-guts are all over the back of my chair now, and my dog is licking some of it up. The first paragraph ...

LOVE IT. I like how you described the city, and it seems like its set in or around the 1940's during the Depression. I'd give it 6 stars if I ...

Why was it cut off there!? I'm already in love with Cyan. That's kinda weird, but he is a good main character. Its good to have one of your main ...

This is really, really sad, but good at the same time. The dying flesh part got me a little confused though, and the last sentence. I'm not exactly good at ...