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Gloria watched the faucet snort out cold rusty water, and then cupped her hands under it as a clear stream flowed out. But she almost immediately pulled back her hands ...

Hi, +1 reviewing over here; prepare for an overload of suggested revisions! CHRONOLOGICAL ORDER BECAUSE I AM A CONTROL FREAK. Also, welcome to YWS. Now! 1) I groaned and looked ...

Hi, +1 here, big fan of all your poems! So, a couple nitpicks here: 1) God should be capitalized (even if you're not religious) 2) reaching for it; The same ...

Hi, +1 is here to review. This is kind of awkward because I am one of your students in Creative Writing. However, I will review this as I would any ...

Hey- +1 here for a review! Prepare for a lot of suggested revisions! So, right away I noticed a few things with these first two lines. An unfamiliar toll clicks ...

First off, let me just say that your description of writer's block was excellent and extremely realistic. Nitpicks: In the following lines, you don't place commas in the pattern you ...

Well, your poem It Started Out Blue made me want to read more, and this had a capturing title, so here I go...... That made it sound like I was ...

Hi, +1 here to review your Falling Deep prologue as best as I can. First, let me start with the suggested revising (I'm doing this as I read along; a ...

I enjoyed this poem, but I have a few pieces of constructive criticism to hand out....for free! Anyway, now that I'm done with bad humor..... Grammar: Good Vocab: Good Consistency: ...

I have a lot of criticism. First of all, the words you used were extremely explicit! This should have been rated 18+ for disturbingly mature content. Secondly, I was shocked ...

Wringer by Jerry Spinelli (hey, my mom likes it, so it's appropriate for all ages, right?) Okay for Now by Gary Schmidt (one of the best books I've ever read) ...

I liked it very much, I thought your descriptions were good, and you really captured what truly goes on during an anxiety attack, something we've all experienced before. Unfortunate points: ...

Unfortunate points: Rhyming inconsistent. Flow inconsistent. Topic cliche. Your use of commas was inconsistent (really harping you on the inconsistency today, aren't I? I apologize, but I can't help m

Criticism first so I can rant. But first I have to rant, because its unbearable to nitpick while holding this in. I LOVE IT, I LOVE IT, I LOVE IT, ...

I agree. I like. Yet, the rhyming was off in places, the rhythm was strange, and it was rather inconsistent and hard to follow. Because of the agreeable ending and ...