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Re: Without His Shadow
Hey Holysocks! Clickdun here. Let's talk about your story... So, first off: For there, following her mum around faithfully, was a shadow with no boobs. That is the weirdest closing ...
Mar 17, 2015 -
Re: My First Experience With Cannibalism
I know this is supposed to be horror, but I laughed at the end. It sounds like a punch line to a Jim Gaffigan joke. "I know people who love ...
Mar 17, 2015 -
Re: Shaping the world: a spear and the essence
Clickdun here :3 Let's talk about your story... Before we get into anything major, let's get a quick bonus stage out of the way! This one is called: how much ...
Feb 11, 2015 -
Re: Earth, and What Became of It
Clickdun here :3 Let's talk about your story... Okay, I previously did a review for this but it was too mean so I've edited it (which seems to have made ...
Feb 8, 2015 -
Re: Immortal Devotion
Clickdun here :3 Let's talk about your story... the sun finally said hi to the villagers. This seems like a very immature line. Being that it sounds like a child ...
Feb 8, 2015 -
Re: Tiny Angel
Clickdun here :3 Let's talk about your poem... Um, I'm testing out the waters here as I've never actually read poetry and am quite nervous about reviewing it. I don't ...
Feb 7, 2015 -
Re: Affinity 2.1 Boy
Clickdun here :3 Let's talk about your story... So, the last chapter was extremely fun, it had a feeling of, what's a good word for it? Mature. It felt like ...
Feb 6, 2015 -
Re: ​Nymphs - Part Two
Clickdun here :3 Let's talk about your story... I'm going to take this one with a grain of salt, it's not that I have doubt in your abilities (the person ...
Feb 6, 2015 -
Re: Jackie's last smile
Hello Jokerwriting! Clickdun here :3 Let's talk about your script... Now, I was always a bit skeptical about any sort of comic book "official" continuity, it always scares me as ...
Feb 4, 2015 -
Re: God Help Us...
Hello Haywire! Clickdun here :3 and I'm late for my review. Let's talk about your story... Let's get the nitpicks out of the way: You did the write thing. 'Write' ...
Feb 3, 2015 -
Re: Prologue
Hey PresidentTurtles! Clickdun here :3 Let's talk about your story. It's not that I didn't like the prologue, it's just that it felt like something you'd find in the epigraphs ...
Feb 1, 2015 -
Re: The Darker Side of Rome
Hey BNW! Clickdun here representing Saturday's Heapings of Helping! :3 Let's talk about your story... I won't lie to you, I'm confused. This whole story seems rushed, like you had ...
Jan 31, 2015 -
Re: Wool of the Prince-- Prologue and Chapter 1
Hello Widdershins! Clickdun here :3 Let's talk about your story... Okay, this is a bit of a bumpy beginning. The first review I did for Wool of the Prince was ...
Jan 30, 2015 -
Re: Affinity 1.0 Boy
Hey Timmy! Clickdun here :3 Let's talk about your story... I like this story so far, it seems to be very well written and the prose is solid. There is ...
Jan 30, 2015 -
Re: Abortion
Hey KnightTeen! Clickdun here :3 Let's talk about your essay... Abortion is a serious subject. It has racked our entire world with anger and resentment, and it is also a ...
Jan 30, 2015