ClaireBear

Beautiful poetry. One thing I noticed was that the rhyme wasn't consistent. Either make it freestyle or rhyming. But I'm being nit picky. This is my favorite on here and ...

Hey there! I liked the concept of having the main character a bad guy. Nice naming of all the characters. In some places there was a little too much detail ...

This is a really dark piece. It sounds like something a tern would leave behind as a suicide not before they jumped off a bridge or something. I really admire ...

Never been a fan of horror but this caught my attention. I liked the quick pacing. What exactly is the prey? Are the humans the prey? And maybe I missed ...

Into the Storm was a nice quick read. The pacing was great not too slow or too fast. By the way I LOVE the names Claudia and Kelly. So cute ...

This was enjoyable to read for me. The rats are the protagonists and the humans and hawks the bad guys. The end of the chapter made me want to read ...

Wow. I really enjoyed reading this. The pace was brisk and I want to know what happened to Egor. You had good characterization. However just as we got to know ...

Okay things to work on first: A lot of the sentences seem to be all the same length- short. It dragged a bit and I got confused about the characters. ...

Wow this certainly grabbed my interest. Thank you for mentioning that the main character is a boy. Hardly draggy at all which is rare in many of the stories I ...

Okay this was slightly interesting. You threw too many names out at us and its harder to.keep track.of them especially when you didn't tell us who they were. Loki sounds ...

Um....sounds and looks like it was written by a fourth-grader. Please edit edit edit edit! It is very hard to read because of improper punctuation no line breaks and hardly ...

It caught my attention in the beginning but got slower and slower. There were too many details for one thing and I ended up skimming over a lot of it. ...

Lost my interest pretty quickly. Old plot. Too many details about "dark lashes caressing her cheek" and that sort if thing. Swear words make it sound even more amateurish. Maybe ...